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    dots Submission Name: My Kool Aiddots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMy Kool Aiddots

    And this is for whoever drawn my thirst away
    In such way which mystery never figure
    A common taste of common temptation
    Yet a taste which gracefully dressed in prayers

    Marbles, beads, means of rituals
    For I have unravel the beauty behind it
    The hands which hold these
    Ooh, please save me a place to stay

    In this white grayish flesh
    A second to commemoration
    Ooh, the chalice of this glorious day
    Put water in my soul, sent me in wet

    And this is for whom I was introduced that day
    What you wore was an unforgettable sin, you whore!
    And even if you were a whore, let it be my only satisfaction
    Let it be my pleasure alone; let you melt into my hunger

    Submitted on 2008-12-29 16:46:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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