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    dots Submission Name: Scalesdots
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    Author: Old
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 69/98/93
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsScalesdots
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    I waltz through open fields of brightness
    as everything contorts and falls around me
    simplicity makes an attempt at mistress
    because things are not as they ought to be.

    An arm from a gut and a revolting marble
    reflects the way of chewing goat meat
    in the several eyes of those who asseble
    to name reality and good name bring me.

    Synthesize the lambs into their sanctuary
    on a black steam cloud from dearth
    as a way to observe electrical field treats
    and see the full spectrum since birth.

    I synthesize.
    you bastardize.
    My third eye can see.
    A good name bring me.




    Submitted on 2008-12-29 18:42:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well i'm not hardly one myself, but they get a bad reputation because of PETA crazies and whatnot. as for their claims of the current meat industry being "evil", i can't say i support that. (i haven't researched it or anything) just the mentions or animals made me think about it.

    hmm, now it's an even bigger mystery as to what this piece is about. oh, the plot thickens!
    | Posted on 2008-12-31 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahha i f*ckin' hate vegans.
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]
      somehow, i feel like this is written from a vegan point of view haha. many say that the animal meat industry has been "[censored]ized" because of the abuse a lot of animals undergo, and that's what the second and third stanza made me think of.
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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