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    dots Submission Name: Outlookdots
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    Author: mae
    Elite Ratio:    5.97 - 596/642/259
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    I do not feel sad today,
    nor even pensive,
    though the clouds are almost black
    and seem to have been
    ripped open.
    Thunder rattles
    my windows
    and wind threatens
    to topple the corn rows outside.

    Rain pouring from the gutters
    brings only anticipation.
    I am trapped inside,
    watching the drama
    on the other side of the glass,
    yet I choose not to feel
    trapped.
    I choose not to let
    the dark clouds
    invade my heart,
    but look ahead instead.

    I choose to wait for the rainbow
    at the end of the rain.
    I seek the gold of the sunset
    after the storm
    to paint my heart.
    And if it's too dark when the storm ends,
    to see either rainbow or sunset,
    then I choose to look again,
    tomorrow.




    Submitted on 2008-12-29 19:37:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm......i love the way this captures optimism so well. the piece has alot of soul.

    i completely agree with empathicaya on the remarks of the quoted line and that line gives the piece a certain clarity.in my opinion.

    the description is nice, and still remains very fluid as far as flow.

    good to see some positive stuff on the site.
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, it's beautiful when that peace comes, huh? When it's from yourself, and you realize that even though it's dark outside, the beauty is from your heart. It's the end of your poem that speaks to me the most, and it's just beautiful. The hope that comes with another new day is really a strong force and it does a lot to keep you going.

    "I seek the gold of the sunset
    after the storm
    to paint my heart."

    This line is full of wisdom, because your not letting the darkness of the day color your heart, but the new hope of the bright colors that will come after. I really love your poems inspired by nature, they are beautiful.
    Thank you for sharing this.
    Be well,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-12-30 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]



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