the woprding is quite good. i'd even venture to say beautiful. exercises are good....
the wording to me...is visually stunning, though thought provoking......sends me off on diffrent tangents of thought but kinda keeps it all almost linear with the visuals......
Ahhh, this is soo beautiful. At the end, I could sort of feel the curtains drawing shut on a beautiful play of nature. It's so beautiful. I feel as if everything words, I don't see anything stunting this poem, it flows so well, and the line breaks are amazing.
"The night proceeds
and the torn sky bleeds
amethyst drops of dew"
Wow, wow, honestly, this just captured my soul, this is just the most amazing line of the poem to me. Amethyst drops of dew, my goodness. It's just gorgeous, wow, and I can see everything, it's beautiful. Thank you for this read, it's beautiful. Nothing more to say, really...
Submission Name: Painting the Gloaming
