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    dots Submission Name: Appeasedots

    Author: wakethedead
    ASL Info:    34/M/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.99 - 13/13/9
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 411
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 565

       Dodling around with music i've written. Does not have the measure right. It just fits when I sang it.

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    Constrained to feel the past
    a way to get by

    Deranged from all anxiety
    That drips across this tragedy
    Our chance has been denied.

    At ease to make amends
    With all these instances
    Still battling out, a time get back

    When sufferings gone mad
    Suffocating in a whirlwind of endless desires

    Pacify with ease
    When hearing the awful plead
    Without the lighter day
    Pacify with ease
    Pursue and persevere
    Commend a vital way

    Submitted on 2009-01-03 07:17:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This definitely seems like it should be in the poetry section instead of lyrics. It feels like the imagery was forced, and it didn't seem to tie together well. Just seemed rather forced in general.
    | Posted on 2009-01-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]

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