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    dots Submission Name: Our life.dots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 483
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1008



    Description:
       To my love.


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    dotsOur life.dots
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    Its me and you.
    A smile sent quickly,
    Like, "whatever, babe"
    I smile back,
    No matter what, "its okay."

    You keep me smiling,
    although at times I wanna cry.
    You won't let me give up,
    although sometimes I don't wanna try.

    And I know you try hard,
    Harder than anyone before,
    You have me so content,
    Never needing any more.

    It's me and you,
    Your arms encircling me,
    holding me up,
    God you're so perfect, love.

    Things won't ever be easy,
    Not as easy as making me smile,
    It'll be a little hard,
    But, only for awhile.

    Every jurney starts out rough,
    like a dirt road,
    But me and you love,
    we are all-wheel drive off-road tough.

    It's me and you.
    laying side by side,
    Sleeping sweetly,
    that's how we will survive.




    Submitted on 2009-01-03 19:20:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good question by Bobby K. Maybe sometimes we as writers expect too much from our lovers. I've been there, done that and it seems in a way you're starting to realize that same thing too. Love is not about words or gestures as a fact, love is beyond us and you seem to realize that. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2009-01-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem, and I don't read a lot of them. But I like this one.
    Let me ask a question,
    Is your guy, the kind of man you read a poem to?
    | Posted on 2009-01-03 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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