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Lost Without Your Light

Author: S.A.M.
ASL Info:    26/f/xx
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Words: 178
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Lost Without Your Light

A kiss was all it took
To change the world forever.
Bitter sweet it must be
To know your lips rest so far,
And your heart with her,
While here there is no other
Only shot gun blasts to a lonely heart
That found shelter in your arms.

Passion cannot be found
In soul less eyes of imposters,
Each sweet caress
Sends times pages back
To your eyes - lost in a loving gaze,
Your arms protecting serenade,
The poison of your kiss was gave,
Loves eternal flame masked,
Unable to feel this thrill again
Living to see his smile once more.

Tonight his eyes shown empty
And yours replaced the vision
Though only for a moment
One heart stopping, god given - moment -
And then a world returned
Based on loveless passion
This prison found by chance,
Your hand the only key
To true redemption.


Submitted on 2009-01-04 18:33:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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an everybody writes a sad sad poem
| Posted on 2011-03-29 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
  first off: LOOOOOOOONG time no talk!

secondly: this was EFFIN amazing!!! it honestly brought me to tears because i understand this completely. man. i don't even know what else to say other than it's perfect.

the first two lines are genius! & are now lines i shall be quoting every now and again
| Posted on 2009-10-09 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm, I like this, and I can understand how you got here with the write, but it is a little vague if read from outside a perspective where someone knows you...still, more :D
| Posted on 2009-01-06 00:00:00 | by DarkGunslinger | [ Reply to This ]
  "Only shot gun blasts to a lonely heart
That found shelter in your arms. "

This is the key to this poem and to this problem. If you really feel this way why should he feel any different? If you do anything in this world do it at 100% if you do it at anything less don't expect more...
| Posted on 2009-01-05 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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