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    dots Submission Name: Apologies.dots
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    Author: EpsilonpsiiChi
    ASL Info:    20 years old/ There.
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 24/12/10
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 138
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 746



    Description:
       Written November 9, 2008 10:01am


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    dotsApologies.dots
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    I am sorry-

    That I was not there when you needed me,
    when you begged to be brought to life.
    When you almost slipped off my tongue,
    Begging to be released.

    I am sorry-

    When I would not-
    When ink would not spill
    Paper would not be near.
    An excuse!
    for you and I both know,
    The flesh is all we need..

    I am sorry-

    That I did not let you roam free.
    Craving, needing that attention.

    I've kept you locked away.
    Drenched and unforgiving; a whole year.

    No light, no
    life.

    I am sorry-
    Thoughts. For not spilling more ink on flesh.





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    ||| Comments |||
      an apology to words that could have been? original for sure.

    personally I think I would go with just one "I am sorry", at the top.
    also maybe drop the "that"s, I think it feels better w/out them.

    just a couple suggestions.

    I hate it when I have a great idea and fail to act.
    lazy? probably.
    | Posted on 2009-01-07 00:00:00 | by pokechop | [ Reply to This ]



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