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    dots Submission Name: Romance.dots
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    Author: EpsilonpsiiChi
    ASL Info:    20 years old/ There.
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 24/12/10
    Words: 372
    Class/Type: Spoof/Satire
    Total Views: 87
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    Bytes: 2572



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    dotsRomance.dots
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    Why do I sit here
    in this new spot of mine.
    Thought I had fallen over
    a long while back.
    I think of you,
    Why.
    I watch this beauty
    of a sun set,
    slowly as my eyes begin to close.
    Of you
    why do I dream.
    I know you are far
    and nothing will bring
    you to me as before.
    I sit here now
    blinded,
    as it turns orange.
    Clouds like feathers
    graze above.
    Why can you not be here
    Too.
    The earth rattles,
    it shakes,
    but nothing I do
    will get you here
    To me.

    You see,
    I know your secret.
    Deep, in and out,
    I've slept it in.
    Watched it grow,
    watched it sink.
    I know why you breathe
    And
    why your heart slows.
    Out you exhale
    with your imagined nightmares;
    Think no one sees.
    You crave that sight
    Crave that spot,
    But sadly it belongs
    Not.
    To you.
    Not
    for you.
    I sit here.
    Not for you.
    This world is mine,
    has been,
    And
    always will be.
    Never yours, Dear.

    What I posses
    you cannot hold.
    You cannot see-
    only pretend to be.
    You cannot know
    why it is so.
    You cannot feel
    what I hold dear.
    I will never be
    what you are to me.
    I will never be
    Someone
    you hold.
    Never someone
    you want.
    Only in my thoughts
    do we exist.
    But we are no more;
    we are End.
    Finished.
    And slaughter you
    I would love to.
    My love is
    your hate.
    Hate me you..
    You.
    Unwanted you stand.
    Such a tragedy.
    Kill me, Dance with me,
    you unwanted whore.

    Because
    posses I will,
    You.
    I will set my gaze on yours.
    Touch you,
    and watch you crumble.
    I will slow my breath on yours;
    slow yours.
    Move aside the curtain
    which you so helplessly hide behind;
    watch you flinch.
    In my heart I hold you dear,
    in my memories.
    I will lay my hand on yours
    and feel it grow cold.
    Just as before.
    I will kiss your lips,
    Embrace you.

    You cannot run from me now.
    No longer can you handle..

    I hear the sirens now
    as I part with your body.
    I hear them declare
    You dead.




    Submitted on 2009-01-05 02:43:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ahh the style is so shifted. or shifting. i think maybe theirs more that i'm seeing in my ignorance. this is like idk.it seems to shift from like an embellishment of "romance" in a satirical voice, then shifting into personal voices crac kling in still muffled by auto response metaphor.

    second theory.........i'm crazy but don't take this the wrong way until you know the lingo, but you're good as stalked.
    | Posted on 2009-01-05 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I really like this piece. As you created a new line with one word such as 'you' after the ones like you give him nothing. This poem alters between caring for 'him' or not. In the middle and towards the end, it seems like you want to be with him, but the end, he is "dead" which can be implied as in, out of your life, or something else. Anyways, this was real good. I liked it very much. Good write :)

    Much love,
    Annie
    | Posted on 2009-01-05 00:00:00 | by unnamedtear | [ Reply to This ]



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