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    dots Submission Name: despite an era of empty sceneries dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsdespite an era of empty sceneries dots
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    oh appropriate thunder
    i have felt you so undeniably
    through the memories of my skin.
    i have held you close
    like salt water
    amongst the milky cobra twilight
    of my heart.
    cheek to cheek,
    no island connects such endless oceans
    such as ours.
    yet i have known you to be soil,
    the earthen flesh of my under-darling revealing.

    i close my eyes
    & push my hands through
    the impossibility of your existence,
    you who've redefined
    a century of despair.
    & soft kisses explore the tiniest maps
    of me
    & i melt,
    my fingers clinch,
    eyes close
    & lost parts of me flutter
    as beating wings would
    after having left their seemingly endless cages.

    you've managed to take my breath
    & change it's rhythm with your own
    as if the impossible task of loving me
    were not allowed,
    as if in the midst of everything
    you came to me to reinvent my life.
    to know you is to collapse into infinite smiling.
    my ring has too many fingers,
    your face, your lovely mind that haunts me even now
    & i am surprised
    that happily ever after
    you could possibly exist at all.
    it seems that somehow i've found peace
    despite an era of empty sceneries.




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      the beauty and eloquence that flows from your soul to page. rapturous. such power in love
    | Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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