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    dots Submission Name: rememberingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 530
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsrememberingdots
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    i'm undone,
    towers of morning,
    birds of thunderfold
    cut me out..
    make hands of my memory
    & release them.
    i speak
    & my lips move like sails,
    like soft mountains
    plush with vintage grass,
    with the moss of always underneath.

    when i touch my fingers
    where yours should be
    i find silence,
    lost air
    where the heart lives,
    sliced open like a fruit,
    pomegranate blood
    beating upon my palm
    where your cheek once rested,
    where as a child
    the sand passed through;
    my hour-glass hand,
    my perfumed skin exploring flowers.

    before i laughed
    i moved into everything
    the way that the moon does.
    i try to breathe you in,
    let the miracle of smiling
    remind me of your mouth,
    the sound of your voice
    when morning comes,
    the brightness in your eyes
    when you know that i love you...




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      I have a few days off coming up and will make a point of coming back here and reading your stuff. I've read a few and while I admit I don't always follow you the whole way through I find myself wishing I could. That's a good thing.

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    | Posted on 2009-02-22 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      i must be in a very nostalgic mood and all this remembering can be a very bitter sweet voyage of rediscovery. it is odd that although we try to forget and move on, we continue to choose to remember moments in our lives that cause us so much pain.

    i very much like your images and the way you have not wasted words and that it is written maturely with the absence of melodrama yet the emotions expressed are convincing and make an immediate connection.

    there are a couple of specific phrases that i particularly felt a great affinity towards...

    where you describe how you 'try to breathe your lover in' ,

    and earlier there is the mention of pomegranates .. ...

    i am glad i found this.
    i shall be back !
    | Posted on 2009-02-21 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


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