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    dots Submission Name: Rhythms of Glassdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsRhythms of Glassdots
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    Rhythms of Glass

    These shards of you
    Broken from the whole crystal you
    Glittering razors
    Of soft defenceless
    Leave me begging their wounds
    To pierce me more

    Each slithers delicate reflection
    Holds you
    With prescient
    To my soul and heart
    Longs
    With darts and bards of blood

    The fragile formed
    Such succulent tortures
    Dreams of you
    Palpable
    Fragments slide between
    Such pulsing wants

    Holographic dust
    Of you
    In fluid font signatures
    Trammel through me
    On tiny claws
    Of bliss

    And their ache
    This needlepoints petal
    In these shavings of you
    Wafts electric spirit
    In me through to you
    Suffers desiderium willingly

    My collected motes of a star
    Burning kisses in my palms
    A stinging draft of love
    Slake my thirst
    In quenching rhymes
    Of you

    Palpable
    Fragments slide between
    Such pulsing wantings




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