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    dots Submission Name: Long Before..dots

    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       nostalgia/following dreams

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    dotsLong Before..dots

    Long before, we sailed to the starlight for love,
    To find out the moon doesn't shine after all,
    When we forget why we traveled so far, just for love?
    When the mind never shines anymore..

    Long before we knew how to know what we want,
    What we need was what we got,
    So how did they know what we want?

    Everything at the tip of your tongue
    When you're young,
    My eye at the lens,
    I guess that depends
    Where it was (went),
    There is a bright light in my palm,
    I'll follow it home,
    But i start to forget where i began to begin
    Those things matter to me more than they did..

    Submitted on 2009-01-05 20:04:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty decent, it has the feeling of being cliché to a sense, but still individual enough to not be considered cliché. Develop this more, it's very short.
    | Posted on 2009-01-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]

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