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    dots Submission Name: marriagedots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 72
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 703



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    he watched her
    like he'd never watched anyone before
    he counted her steps
    and smiled and the tears fell down her face
    with every step she got closer
    and heart beat faster
    this is it he thought
    as he took her hand
    and they turned away from everyone
    their were murmurs
    and sighs
    but nothing could cover the sound of the voice
    bringing them together
    making them whole
    finally, what seemed like a lifetime ended
    all too soon
    with the final words
    I know pronounce you man and wife
    she smiled at him
    and him at her
    and life was everything they thought it would be.




    Submitted on 2009-01-06 04:36:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah and?

    This is like one of those generic images you find on post cards. It doesn't say much although it tries really hard. I dunno...
    | Posted on 2009-01-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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