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    dots Submission Name: Skin Deep Devotiondots
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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSkin Deep Devotiondots
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    I look beautiful today
    So lovely in this skin I知 in
    And if it peals
    Or starts to fade
    At least I値l know it痴 real

    I知 beautiful today
    Draped in fineries or gold
    And one who can稚 be sold
    On quick frivolous throw-aways
    Save for a heart and some more lip gloss
    I知 perfect, one might say

    So exquisite!
    While hearts fly out the window
    I heard a few fall down the stairs
    But oh, who cares?
    I知 so beautiful
    How could I stray from my own affairs?

    How could I take my hypnotic gaze
    I say,
    From such burning green eyes?
    I am spent!
    These hours pass timidly
    Perhaps with tears, falling rhythmically
    And I知 beautiful
    So then why not
    Content?




    Submitted on 2009-01-06 20:47:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "So then why not Content?"

    Because you never met someone who has burning green eyes like yours. Then you wouldn't have to take your gaze from them for a second. :)

    I'm speaking from experience here. I have those kind of eyes too and the woman I've spend most time with had them almost exactly the same. Although hers had some more brown tones around the irises and mine look more blue almost steel gray sometimes. I kept telling her that it was those eyes that kept us together. She was like: No! You only like me because of my big boobs. :D

    I can tell you though that there's nothing wrong with feeling good about yourself if you don't overdo it...
    | Posted on 2012-10-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahaha wow this sounds like classic Jamie!!! But usually when you're home it's the opposite lol. You are gorgeous sis, you always have been and always will be. On top of that your personality makes you stand out from everybody! I love you and I hope your apartment is nice!!!
    Love,
    Lil Alz <333
    | Posted on 2011-09-25 00:00:00 | by xxalpal4everzxx | [ Reply to This ]
      Ths poem has great voice! I can almost see the girl in it. This is very versital in how it speaks to people either with a bit of sarcasm or empathy, yet it is fresh .

    jan
    | Posted on 2009-01-06 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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