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    dots Submission Name: vomitdots
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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsvomitdots
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    this climate has become stale

    a seeping paranoia controlling YOU,belly outwards

    a macarbe gorging.

    until my leg is blasted clean off, how will i endeavor to use it?

    Fraught-stricken and aching with incredulous dis-belief this fear snowballs

    Over-impending doom won't saturate my bones,or, if it does, then grind them, and sneak me into mugabe's coffin

    where the droll icy grasp of real evil will slowly chomp at his eyes and eternally slice at his breast- until he weeps

    because there is nothing left




    Submitted on 2009-01-07 01:34:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is strange. i don't really get much of a vomit feeling of of it belly outward to me could be intesines outward belly splayed or distended stomach common in malnourishment or bulimia. Not sure what macarbeis but the is a passion even here. There is a sense of anquish. Left me puzzled but made me want to read it again.
    | Posted on 2009-01-08 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]


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