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    dots Submission Name: Opticsdots
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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 135
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       i don't know.
    well, i do, but, well, yes.
    yar.


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    There were days when the thought
    of change was a welcome gift
    to share. Days when
    each particular moment
    was all about light
    and nothing else.
    Days where I
    would bite my nails
    in search of a mirror
    to tell me I should
    run away.

    To Rome, Venice,
    hell, Scotland will do for now.
    To the Seychelles, Bali,
    although I've already been there.
    To Paris, a clichéd lover's paradise
    where I could walk down streets
    starting with Rue and ending
    with Boulevard.

    Home, and why I think suffering
    is but stolen moments. Away from sleeping.
    Away from catching stars and placing them
    upon my lips, so I can taste what it means exactly
    to know of another home. To close my eyes,
    spread the sky wide, immerse myself in hues
    I'll never name
    but only see
    in a master painting.

    Placental. This is where I choose to begin it all.
    Beyond riverboats. Beyond irises and violets
    and marigolds. Disbelief follows me as I scramble
    beyond this prow, below the arching waters
    of my Babylon.

    Days when solitude
    becomes the only sign
    that I am alive and well
    to share with you
    my vision.




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    ||| Comments |||
      The most interesting thing about this poem is the past tense.
    These days were, what are the days now?
    Also, what does Babylon mean to you? Gateway of the Gods, or Confusion? Justice, from the Code of Hammurabi?
    The last two stanzas are by far the best.
    | Posted on 2009-01-09 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]



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