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    dots Submission Name: You Should See the Carddots

    Author: ExactlyThat
    Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 4/7/9
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsYou Should See the Carddots

    Itís hard to make plans for my Valentine
    but you know me, Iíll come up with something.
    The retailers had better not count on me
    to make their February registers ring.

    My Valentine is not a lover of chocolate
    and a bouquet of roses just die too quick.
    Iím going to consult the Karma Sutra
    to see if I can find a new toe curling trick.

    Back when it was written they were a sexy lot
    with imaginations that knew no bounds.
    My Valentine is the rather excitable sort
    letís see if we can find some new guttural sounds.

    Valentineís Day is supposed to be about love
    and itís other worldly form of phantasm.
    This year my gift is going to be something tangible
    like a mind blowing, off the hook, seismic orgasm.

    Submitted on 2009-01-07 20:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      delightful. clever. a wonderful read
    | Posted on 2009-01-13 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, I liked this a lot. The topic is always a great one and with the title I wasn't sure what to expect. You had a nice flow and it's very well done.
    | Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked how you didn't follow a rhyme scheme, the topic is also quite intresting. =] Nice job !
    | Posted on 2009-01-09 00:00:00 | by InsanePain | [ Reply to This ]

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