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    dots Submission Name: and the phone ringsdots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsand the phone ringsdots
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    if i call you
    would you answer me
    or would i be ignored
    like the others
    who have called you before

    if i call
    would you be happy
    to hear my voice
    or just be sad
    to hear from me

    if i call
    would you want
    to talk with me
    or would you be saden
    to hear my voice

    if i called you
    just to say hello
    would that be all
    it would be
    or would it be more

    if i called
    would you smile
    and say hello to me
    and be happy
    to hear my voice again




    Submitted on 2009-01-07 21:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes i would be happy to hear from you
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by darkone | [ Reply to This ]


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