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    dots Submission Name: a Hard, Lonely Road.dots
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    Author: CourtneyLynne
    ASL Info:    23/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 74/70/56
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 633
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       mmmrrrfff. this one is hideous.
    I love it.
    ew.



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    dotsa Hard, Lonely Road.dots
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    Heels of steel on hardened feet
    brought on by this edgy street
    walking with our heads hung low,
    trudging- with no place to go.
    Were just hanging on to love
    by threads of cobwebs high above;
    dreaming of our fabled knights,
    kings and queens with better rights.
    Comforts foods made for the brain,
    but here Im standing once again,
    left along this lonely street-
    with no place to rest my feet.

    Is it always cut and dried?

    Living life without your eyes
    left me with a dark surprise,
    I cant seem to shed my ways
    leave the past and live my days
    for when I try, there youll be,
    always calling out to me,
    asking- pleading for me, please,
    and Im begging for release;

    I want to leave my bitter past,
    shed away this bulky cast
    around my soul, around my eyes,
    shut away this hard disguise;
    turn my life on back around
    and find myself on softer ground.




    Submitted on 2009-01-08 00:08:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this write, im not really sure why. but i can feel the intense-ness and i like that it really shows the pain there

    peace

    sam
    | Posted on 2009-01-09 00:00:00 | by emogurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Comforts foods made for the brain,

    techniquely it should be comfort foods if you're using that phrase as a euphemism for some sort of influencing force on the mind. emotion...idk.

    Besides that nothing stuck out to me as a clog. the format was very standard, but done fairly well. the imagery played out pretty nice as a walk away from some broken castle or kingdom on a cracked and hard road. longing for some sort of resolve.......softer ground.

    i think that's about all

    | Posted on 2009-01-08 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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