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    dots Submission Name: Good to the last dropdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGood to the last dropdots
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    You were "good to the last drop,"
    you always promised that.
    But when the coffee turns stale,
    from being left out too long,
    You can't keep grasping at the
    freshness that left long ago.

    We both denied it,
    it was "good to the last drop"
    but we both got fed up,
    with the promise of the caffeine high
    that was never enough.

    We built up an immunity to it,
    to each other,
    to our words,
    until our feelings lost the freshness in it's self.
    Until we turned stale,
    and lost the high of our relationship.

    We were promised "good to the last drop,"
    but sometimes the last drop isn't always that good.




    Submitted on 2009-01-08 05:12:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good, and a deft description of a relationship that just "wore out"! Some relationships just get stronger with time, and some grow stale when the new wears off!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-01-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good way to explain the end of a relationship. I may just have to quote a few of those words in the near future.
    Anyway it was a great piece.
    "With the promise of a caffeine high that was never enough" is exactly what I'm dealing with right now.
    It's nice to be able to read something that automatically verifies what's really going on in my own head.
    Thanks for posting this.
    | Posted on 2009-01-08 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]


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