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    dots Submission Name: Idle Timedots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       It's an ugly, lonely world...in my head tonight


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    dotsIdle Timedots
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    Nothing to watch and no books to read
    Giving my demons their chance to breed
    Twisting regrets and tormenting scars
    Beauty withers away behind the steel bars

    Mirror mirror on the wall
    Do me a favor and let yourself fall
    I don't need reflection to see the real me
    Hidden is the truth that eyes do not see

    I may not be a picture for any fingers to caress
    I may not be a love for any one to confess
    There's beauty inside somewhere beneath the skin
    Behind all those demons with shields of my sin

    Integrity lives on as pride covers it's face
    I did the right thing but I am still a disgrace
    Demons in my head have taken the power

    Piece by piece...they will devour









    Submitted on 2009-01-08 12:58:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very well done, pretty lady! Good structure, good meter and good rhyme scheme. Makes me think of my brooding thoughts when in jail back in my wild younger days!!

    But the real you that I see in your writing is a bright and lovely butterfly, flying gracefully and enchanting all of the animals in the forest!!!
    | Posted on 2009-01-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      hey Jessa is this the poem u were talking about???? I fly like it... Its very dark and actually made me think about how've ive bin and how I deal with certain shit

    And thanks for the advice I actually started to cry reading this.... I'm not so better today, I had a panic attack while I was waiting for the bell to ring..... I just started thinking about [censored].... My ella says keep the past in the past. It its easier said then done. I tried writing last nite instead of cutting, it helped a lil bit but not for long.... My tsacher was helping me get iut of a flashback by telling me to think of a safe place and I thot of my aunts house and the beach... I'm on these Meds that r supposed to help u stop addictive behavior, but obviously they aren't working... My anxiety has bin so high lately and I can't find anything to keep it down...: oh and I no wut u mean with cigarrets, I can't live without them there the one thing that helps my anxiety go down.... Its not rly good wen I'm I'm skool but I don't get caught wen I go 'take' a walk......

    Sorry for my rambling... Thanks for the talk tho... Andjust for the record my news years sucked ass... I was stuck In hell for the hole effing vacation....
    Cry
    | Posted on 2009-01-08 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]


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