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    dots Submission Name: Transitory Mirrordots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTransitory Mirrordots
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    Transitory Mirror

    Dark pools look back
    These eyes
    Now slow mark their lines
    Crows feet emotions
    With sun kind smiles
    Older now
    As they stare

    Their sparkle sheen
    Hides the so many things
    Times have come
    Gone into an Iris of thought
    The lookouts of my soul
    Wonder at themselves
    Behind me

    Spent seconds of captured light
    Ricochet in sadness and laughter
    And draw their features
    In ideograms of tears
    To their corners
    Here where my dreams reside
    And where my fear can hide

    Gentle brown they seem now
    Of one time darkness confiscated
    And madness rims
    In their violence no longer becomes
    The person beneath them
    But echoes still
    All the footprints of life

    Stranger they are to the knowing
    Recognition reflecting
    The thronging colours reassemble
    And presume to know me
    The lover me
    The hidden me dips the razor in cold clear water
    And carries on shaving







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