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    dots Submission Name: Swan Songdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 402
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsSwan Songdots

    Swan Song

    Stealthy killers have crept
    Their secret bullet
    Reaching this empty nest
    Swans too unaware of attack
    Arms aimed riffles

    Pleasure hunted

    Only one reflection now
    No other dark gaze looks back
    No other gliding ripples
    All reassurance has gone

    The lake of desolation
    Coaxed her half hearted rage
    Bleeds from a crooked corpse
    Pathetic winds stir dead feathers and reeds
    To animation
    No gentle neck arching
    Wings now absent haunt the breeze
    She is a pose of fear

    The air to void to fly
    No other yellow bill or back glinting eye
    None could vie with her chosen
    White beauty now unmoving
    Scarlet slash wickedly marring
    Maiming her heart with sudden isolation

    The ballet of the dieing
    Cannot see the cruel eyes prying
    Exulting in the deed
    Do not hear her lament
    Joining in a pact a spur of black
    Still mournfully beating

    Madness flapping struggled with reflection
    To lift his head from under
    To breathe till breath would burst her lungs asunder
    But lower still he seemed to fall

    Days shot sound echoed constantly
    Unmoving nights which found her
    Till dawn would bring its shadows
    Illusions born by sorrows
    Sends haunted dreams
    In madness before her

    Cast the moon in images of death defied before her

    A phantom wrapped in eyes of night
    And side by side they glide
    Mourning on the silver tide

    Three nights and no more can the moon contain
    In her heart the spur of black
    Lay barren ready for a violent ice caress
    For paths to cross just once
    She vowed in her willingness
    To become in her will an ice sculpture of

    So harboured deep in proud beauty
    A malice in hatreds empathy
    Prayed for fate and chance to shake hands

    And there on the shore
    The assassin stands

    Gliding wistfully she
    Using all her grace and beauty
    To bind her quarry
    In her natural mystery
    Slipped over the stillness
    Approaching with coyness
    Mesmerising light in water gleams
    Her fatal white and an arrow beak
    Fixed the man by her darkest dreams
    Opening wings
    Sheds intent glare beguiling
    Her neck an arrow javelin
    Unleashed her fury broke true and deadly
    With lethal intention

    For her mate
    She launched her self upon him

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