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    dots Submission Name: An Interjectiondots
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    Author: bkj43
    ASL Info:    22/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    3.92 - 119/140/79
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       About the things we sometimes forget about


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    dotsAn Interjectiondots
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    Headed to a ball
    Of beauty
    And disbelief--
    Pleasure being grown
    From the root of every feet.

    Driving in my truck,
    I act out fantasies within my head
    Of the life that lay ahead;
    Smiles and laughs
    Within a building of achievement--
    Looking for a moment to share
    With someone who cares.

    !

    A bird darts in front of my vehicle,
    His wings and dilemma
    Occupy me
    And he's gone...

    What a moment--
    Damn thing was almost ended
    Getting in the way
    Of my progress.
    Now,

    Where was I?




    Submitted on 2009-01-08 20:28:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It really is something, isnt it, to recognize a moment for what it really is? Most times, I feel, we get so caught up in what we are doing or what has just been done, we fail to understand each significant moment as it passes by. Here you have related a simple, sincere moment, but to stop and think it over, to appreciate or regret it, makes it complicated, makes it worth telling someone about, writing it down on paper.

    Slow, pure moments make fine poetry. The thoughts of which make great poetry.

    I enjoyed reading the poem.
    Tony
    | Posted on 2009-01-09 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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