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    dots Submission Name: Java Joe and the Junkie Girldots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2788/1297/258
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsJava Joe and the Junkie Girldots
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    "I wish you knew how much I adore you," said Lilly Latte, the lady with cocoa bean eyes and espresso curls.

    "You're such a foamy joe, so strong, so undiluted. If I didn't know any better, I'd say our stint in rehab at Maxwell House was meant to be, my Colombian One, my Sumatran Blend."

    "And you, my steamed bean," said he, "are as frothy as milk and as stimulating as the warm kiss of caffeine."




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      Coffee is a very brown-coloured beverage,
    Piping hot,
    Fresh from the pot,
    Though a little too bitter for my liking,
    Be careful you don't burn your lips.
    | Posted on 2009-02-23 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]
      colourful.

    this situation can be easily pictured in my mind's eye. a zany mix; offbeat and mercurial.

    i always enjoy these flash-fiction type pieces. lots mentioned in such a short space of time. you pull a lot out here and give very vivid impressions.

    yup.
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      snort.

    I love this 'I'd say our stint in rehab at Maxwell House'... it made me chuckle actually.

    with your work, it is sometimes hard to comment on, for me at least; there always seems to be an added layer. or perhaps it is that i always look for one; a twist wanting to be found. or maybe it is just the way my brain works, couldn't tell ya.

    hmmmm. not much of a comment.

    kudos to the name, as well as 'steamed bean'
    (smile).
    | Posted on 2009-01-10 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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