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    dots Submission Name: Caged Animaldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsCaged Animaldots
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    Caged Animal

    My brooding darkness
    Thinks on you today

    Impatient animal
    It paces my rib cage
    Back and forth
    Back and forth
    As steady
    As my heart

    Your treasured image
    Boils away my resolve
    To unleash its blood
    Animal blood
    Dark
    And wanting

    It tore at your dress
    Strips you naked

    Those images I created
    Of fired eyes
    Rake my nails
    Over you
    Hungry talons of desire

    Animal to devour you
    Its starving burning
    Appeased by each and every mouthful
    Its strength overwhelming
    Pins you
    Holds you in a desperate struggle

    Has you animal
    Takes you animal
    Lusts animal
    Loves animal
    Paces my rib cage
    Back and forth
    Back and forth
    As steadily
    As my heart




    Submitted on 2009-01-09 16:54:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is a turn on for all senses. I loved everything about the, there's nothing gentle about this desire, as the previous comment was made I feel it is also my opinion this is the very meaning of lust. "Animal" Thanks for sharing I absolutely loved this!


    Cait
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I am astounded that no one else has commented on this. My new favorite. I have nothing at all to say about it besides damn, to describe lust in such a way has always escaped me. My eyes are like a cm wider afer reading this lol. I really liked it in short.
    | Posted on 2009-01-10 00:00:00 | by SDodson | [ Reply to This ]


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