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    dots Submission Name: Hasanythingevergoneright?dots
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    Author: Jessvicious
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 324
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsHasanythingevergoneright?dots
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    All this pain.
    All this hurt.
    Has anything ever gone right?
    She looks back on her broken past.
    She looks around her hurting present.
    She looks forward on her dark future.
    Has anything ever gone right?
    She doesn't remember what it feels like to have a real smile on her face.
    She doesn't remember what it feels like to be happy.
    She doesn't remember what its like to have a fully healed wrist.
    She doesn't remember what its like to not have that fimiliar itcing feeling at her wrist.
    Has anything ever gone right?
    No one understands why she locks herself in her room with her radio turned up,
    Just so she can scream.
    Just so no one will hear her broken sobs.
    No one understands why she wont let anyone get to know her.
    No one understands why she doesn't trust anyone.
    No one understands what it's like to be on the edge.
    And no one is there to save you from yourself
    No one understands why she breaks down.
    No one understands that it is possible for you to be compleatly lost,
    yet know exactly where you are.
    Has anything ever gone right?
    No one knows why she feels hurt.
    No one knows why she cries herself to sleep at night.
    No one knows that she wants to leave and never come back.
    No one knows that she would kill to be someone else.
    No one knows that even when she smiles,
    its fake.
    No one knows that she thinks about suicide everyday.
    No one knows what its like,
    to be her.
    Does anything ever go right?
    No,
    Not for her.
    So she swallows the pills and grabs the razor.
    She lays down now.
    The blood in her veins has gone cold as ice.
    She is numb now.
    And,
    Just before she closes her eyes and takes her last breath.
    She smiles,
    Just a small one to herself.
    Finally happy.
    -Jess.Vicious 1/8/09




    Submitted on 2009-01-09 23:29:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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