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    dots Submission Name: Divided...dots
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    Author: -Lith-Ium-
    ASL Info:    23/F/Far Away
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 55/107/58
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 458



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    dotsDivided...dots
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    Darkened the alley, my eyes, and the sky,
    And memories, a lullaby,
    On darkened streets.

    My heart, it whispers... a mere lie,
    Used once too often to defy -
    Reality. It beats.

    And whispers - does not want to cry,
    And fancies eyes, empty and dry,
    Cold. It repeats...

    The symphony. Now please, stand by,
    It still awaits for the reply,
    (Yet the eternal, cheats.)




    Submitted on 2009-01-10 01:39:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The flow is fantastic, and the vague feelings. Perfect.

    Your poem is making it to my favorites list.

    And I apologize for not expressing more opinions on your work. I am just busy enjoying the feeling it has evoked.

    Thank you.

    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by EpsilonpsiiChi | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, interesting thoughts are captured, really, in- BETWEEN the words. The strange pauses and flow of this work is extremely interesting to me.
    "The symphony. Now please, stand by,"
    I really like that line, I think this has made it into my favorites list, and that's good, I don't have much on my favorites, I'm kinda picky, so thank-you for the good read.


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    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by eggshells | [ Reply to This ]



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