This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Just Because

Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 777
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 321


Just Because

every clock would stop
were you ever lost to me.
In a world in you were not
I would cease to be.
Simply to behold you
i nearly cannot breathe,
Only half of whole
Were you ever to leave.
I would die,
shed blood for-
Just because
you asked me to.

Submitted on 2009-01-10 19:08:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  i understand completely
such is love
blessings to you and yours
| Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by shoosh | [ Reply to This ]
  first of all i love this it was awesome
seconds of all this was one of thoes poems with meaning... and that means it had sad side to it whihc was pretty good that is hard to have two sides to poems

you could improve upon it in stead of: like leaving "the reader" at a stand still at the end

other than that it seems fine to me also awesome job... if i havent said so allready
| Posted on 2009-01-10 00:00:00 | by Donokin | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?