Just Because

Author: Voodoo_Lounge ASL Info:    21/F/OH Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171 Words: 51

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Just Because

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every clock would stop were you ever lost to me. In a world in you were not I would cease to be. Simply to behold you i nearly cannot breathe, Only half of whole Were you ever to leave. I would die, shed blood for- Just because you asked me to.

Submitted on 2009-01-10 19:08:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i understand completely such is love blessings to you and yours

| Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by shoosh | [ Reply to This ]

first of all i love this it was awesome seconds of all this was one of thoes poems with meaning... and that means it had sad side to it whihc was pretty good that is hard to have two sides to poems you could improve upon it in stead of: like leaving "the reader" at a stand still at the end other than that it seems fine to me also awesome job... if i havent said so allready

| Posted on 2009-01-10 00:00:00 | by Donokin | [ Reply to This ]

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