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    dots Submission Name: Run Away Girliedots
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    Author: SDodson
    ASL Info:    18/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 35/22/21
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 709
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 515



    Description:
       Work in progress, I'm not too sure about it yet especially what I mean, but the words were beating my brain and this is what came down....

    I'm thinking I want the two parts to connect somehow but partway through I hit up against something else that sounded like it would be fun to write so this will have to wait I suppose.


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    dotsRun Away Girliedots
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    When the nights are cold
    And the sky is empty
    My words escape me
    Your eyes full of pity

    -Run away girlie, quick as can be-

    I draw a blank
    Pen to paper
    My heart the only sound
    Lie still, head on the ground

    -Run away girlie, they're comin for me-

    Dead and not caring
    Pulse an empty thud
    Let the sun come up
    Burn me away

    -Keep running girlie, you can't catch me-




    Submitted on 2009-01-10 21:14:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that gave me chills. all i can say is, i know.
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]


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