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    dots Submission Name: The Great Unquietdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Great Unquietdots
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    The Great Unquiet

    Wherefore you this incandescent lit
    Should you turn all your light
    To sorrow

    Wherefore you jewel amidst pebbles
    Should you make from diamonds
    This sadness

    So

    Come my love think not
    Break nothing against frustrated walls
    Do not my love
    Strip illusion to threadbare patterns
    Tune not this needles twine
    To pluck inharmonious chords

    Wherefore the heat of your tears
    Should you trace your love by their fate
    To this weariness

    Wherefore you this petal of tenderness
    Should you so paint your colours to answer drear
    In emptiness

    Quite my love think not on
    Take this salted pinch to toss it wayward
    And do not my love
    Burden your dreams with such as arid sands
    Or make their dunes
    To mountains unattainable

    Hush now my love
    Do trouble not
    Come rest your tired soul

    Hush now my love
    Be at peace
    Come rest in my quiet soul

    Wherefore now my spirits light
    Should it not dance with you
    To forever

    Wherefore I if not by your side
    To mark such sorrow, such sadness
    Into I goes all weariness and emptiness




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