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    dots Submission Name: Remember Medots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 366
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsRemember Medots
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    Remember Me

    Cold wet coastal today
    I escaped
    Sat myself behind a sanctuary
    The rain beating rhythms
    On window panes
    Hot coffee and brandy
    Warm inside The Athena Café

    Radio spends its missed tuning
    Hissing tinny tunes
    Love songs
    Of losing
    Love songs of having
    Love sings
    Of wanting

    Blank the grey sky
    Flattering dreaming thoughts meander
    On emotions wandering
    Focus themselves
    With photographic memories

    I see
    The smile
    White satin dressed
    Curls of auburn red
    All I fell for
    All I lived for
    My Princess

    Her crown tilted
    The mischievous angels
    Of her

    I sigh

    As my fingers remember
    They once ran themselves
    Through your hair
    As my lips in accord
    Re-taste the peach
    Of kisses
    I once knew
    Sometime so long ago

    I can hear your voice
    Silent echo
    A touch in my soul
    Sentient it is
    Hieroglyphic speaks
    Reverberating something
    Deep and known

    My eyes replay moments
    Of vague tactile loving
    These trespasses
    And these memories wishing
    Batter at some-where’s
    Deeping
    Inside of me

    Aching
    Longing

    Word forms swirl
    In printed pages of you
    And send messages of distance
    So far from me
    So far
    From you

    To a horizon which is
    Part of me
    Out into grey meridians
    My heart travels
    While my seconds record
    The splitter and splatter
    Of rain on the window pane
    Looking back at me
    With your reflection

    Another cigarette
    My coffee cold
    And nothing but froth
    The heat of my brandy
    Matches the twists of floating smoke
    Sends my thoughts out riding point
    To the cavalry of clouds
    With the banner of love

    Rides wing-ed horses
    With fire on their hooves
    Lifts all this nescient knowing
    Rushes headlong
    To you

    Tiny rippled pools
    Drop on the sheen
    Dark colours anew
    Of rain fall continues
    One more coffee
    No more brandy
    Time to leave slowly
    And some how find an end
    For this poetry

    Find a way to Morse code my heart
    Out into expansive skies
    And wrap my arms
    Around you

    I remember the home
    Of holding you

    The rain has stopped





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    ||| Comments |||
      I find it odd how my favorite writes leave me without anything to say about them. This is one of those. You write so beautifully and heartfelt. I mean to say the pain you feel makes your words that much more magnificent. I especially liked for some reason that you used the name of a particular cafe, that doesn't happen often. Coffee, cigarettes, and booze always seems to go hand in hand with whatever ailes me.
    I loved it.

    -Sarah
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by SDodson | [ Reply to This ]


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