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    dots Submission Name: Daisey blue lies too..dots
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    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsDaisey blue lies too..dots
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    Daisey blue was picked fresh
    on a sundays afternoon still dressed in mornings dew.
    She was somethin' beautiful.
    Put into a vase made and painted just for you.
    She was somethin' beautiful.

    Sat alone there in the kitchen, listening to
    thoughts from someone as lost wandering too..
    Staring at Daisey blue lying in water, too cool to move.

    Enjoying your crisp newness
    untill leaving me wilted/bone dry..
    like they always do.
    You should know you weren't picked from a few
    but, a sea of blue fully bloomed none like you..

    Years from now found inside a book..
    between pages two hundred and one
    and two hundred and two
    a forgotten daisey bled out it's blue.

    For somebody, someone..
    nobody ever knew.




    Submitted on 2009-01-11 17:47:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very insightful. such a delicate metaphor moved through light and sound and silk. an utter pleasure to behold

    "You should know you weren't picked from a few
    but, a sea of blue fully bloomed none like you.."

    delightful


    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      What a beautiful peice!
    The part of the piece that shone and in return made it shine was the personification of the flower,
    I think the best line was:
    "She was somethin' beautiful"
    I love that twang that was written in, "somethin'"

    Good Write.
    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading your poem. I don't know if I've ever seen a blue Daisey before.

    Love,
    C
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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