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Author:	narcolepsy
ASL Info:	19/F/Pa
Elite Ratio:	3.97 - 129/135/60
Words:	29

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	693
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Bytes:	226

Description:
was trippin on mushies with my ex and i realized he was really bad for me. obviously i don't really believe he's a demon, but that's how i saw him when i was trippin... and it's definitely a metaphorical thing.

b.j.g

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a demon in my lap
blue face
third eye staring
darkness screams

BACK!

trapped in this hell
incubus
clawing at my legs
trying to drain me
completely.

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