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    dots Submission Name: b.j.gdots
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    Author: narcolepsy
    ASL Info:    19/F/Pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 129/135/60
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       was trippin on mushies with my ex and i realized he was really bad for me. obviously i don't really believe he's a demon, but that's how i saw him when i was trippin... and it's definitely a metaphorical thing.


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    dotsb.j.gdots
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    a demon in my lap
    blue face
    third eye staring
    darkness screams

    BACK!

    trapped in this hell
    incubus
    clawing at my legs
    trying to drain me
    completely.




    Submitted on 2009-01-11 21:04:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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