Description: Just something i wrote during school one day. You dont have to understand it, or even read it. its just a few things i wanted to get off my chest. its not written in my usual form, and its really a lot to take in. But i wanted to know what people thought of it, because its written in such an odd form on an odd subject. So If you dont understand it, say so. If you hate it, thats what i want to hear. All i ask for is opinion.
Your own flesh and blood -------------------------------------------
Theres gotta be a million gay people
In this screwed up world
And you still wont except me
For who I am
But theres gotta be
A billion homophobes
Out there too
And I guess if you
Want to take their side
That’s up to you
But why wont you side with me?
Your own flesh and blood
You just hung me out to dry
Don’t care if I cry
And that I have to lie
I lie to you everyday
And every time I say
That I love you because I don’t
I can’t stand you but I won’t
Put down this front
The fake smiles and lies
The midnight cries that you miss
Taking place only in your absence
Why do you hate something,
That you don’t even understand?
If you’d just listen
I’d tell you what I am
But you won’t
And you don’t
You don’t even care
I’m your daughter
Your own flesh and blood
Not some dirty whore
But you don’t care about me
So I guess that doesn’t matter anymore
But why? Because I’m gay?
Does it really even matter?
Lets not start pointing fingers
Or my heart just might shatter
Because I know just where you’ll point
Who you look upon with shame
Why can you not see
She’s not the one to blame
Don’t you think that without her,
I’d probably be the same?
I’m Gay! I have a girlfriend!
Its not like I killed someone.
But the way you look upon me
That’s what I might as well have done
Because its killing your writing,you would have been better off making a journal entry as follows:
"Hi everybody! just want to let you guys know Im having a hard time with my parents at the moment,they find it difficult to deal with my sexuality"
But then again,Im dont actually know if your gay at all,I dont care really.
You spent a long time saying what i compressed into two sentences,so you should work on pacing your work,examine what your actually saying rather than trying to rhyme everything.
"nobody loves me
just a memory
they cant see beyond the fascade
see me for who I truly am
behind this broken smile
Im simply a child
Cant you understand
this wasnt what I planned
didnt wanna make you hurt
its not what you deserve
so try see the real me okay?"
I just wrote than in about a minute and a half,it sucks...
Its all angsty and the rhyming is forced,
but you see how easy it is?
Maybe you should be spending more time on your poems
Make em more original
I have no problem with your actual content,Ive the utmost respect for a persons sexuality,but your poetry needs work.
If theres one thing thats promising here,at least its honestly written.
rough subject. but expressed in such an artful manner. like looking at a cubist painting. all the essence and brutality without flowery alliterations and metaphors.
I liked this, simply because of the length, truthful expression of ur feelings, and how i can utterly and fully relate.
*hugs tightly* We'll make it babe
Submission Name: Your own flesh and blood
