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    dots Submission Name: Sleeping Beautydots
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    Author: SDodson
    ASL Info:    18/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 35/22/21
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
    Total Views: 588
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    Bytes: 823



    Description:
       I HATE being someone's personal alarm clock especially when they treat me like an inanimate object just because they don't want to wake up. FUCK YOU and your 12 hours of sleep.


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    dotsSleeping Beautydots
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    Wake up Sleeping Beauty
    Your day yet to begin
    Wake up Sleeping Beauty
    I long to see that grin

    Softly I whisper
    Your body I shake
    Why Sleeping Beauty
    Are you so hard to wake?

    Wake up Sleeping Beauty
    Don't yell at me to leave you be
    Can't you see Sleeping Beauty?
    The only one who loves you is me

    Wake up Sleeping Beauty
    You kick me to go away
    With you Sleeping Beauty
    I wish to spend my day

    Wake up Sleeping Beauty
    My aggrevation paramounts like no other
    You are lucky Sleeping Beauty
    That you are my lover

    Open your eyes Sleeping Beauty
    Or they will be sewn shut
    Wake up Sleeping Beauty
    Or your throat I will cut




    Submitted on 2009-01-12 01:15:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. I loved how it started out kind sweet and the ended angry and bitter.
    I agree with you completely, I used to be ina relationship like this. Didn't last very long.
    Hope everything turns about better.
    Keep up the fantastic work, and I'll keep reading.

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2009-01-12 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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