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    dots Submission Name: THESEUS AND THE MINOTAURdots
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    Author: hanuman
    ASL Info:    3 score & 10 & some!
    Elite Ratio:    5.99 - 804/1015/239
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
        This poem recaptures through the legend of Theseus and the Minotaur the trials and tribulations of my friend, Quentin, as he struggles with the later effects of two cancers. I have posted this poem before when he was first diagnosed. The quality of his life is now utterly miserable. He can no longer walk unaided. He is doubly incontinent. He's on enough painkillers to knock out a horse, but often his pain medication is not sufficient. Despite all this, he is not miserable. He can't work, but he does write to try and maintain his independence. This is unashamedly a plug that you consider visiting his website (http://www.phlaunt.com/quentin/) and taking a look about the book he has written "A Bloke's Guide to Nutrition". He is the most brilliant man I know and here is a gift to help the bloke in your life (or the inner bloke in all of you) to have a healthier, happier future.
    To see my other poems about Quentin, check out:
    http://elusivepoem.wikispaces.com/Page+8


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    dotsTHESEUS AND THE MINOTAURdots
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    Theseus sailed across the blue Aegean Sea
    With his childhood friends,
    To sacrifice to the cruel king,
    To face his nemesis
    In the labyrinth of his genes.

    Lapis lazuli eyes were painted on the prow
    To steer through storm and see through night
    And navigate his chromosomes.

    Theseus enters the maze of fate
    To meet his Minotaur,
    The monster we all must face
    In some dark alley at some dead end.

    He must walk all corridors of pain,
    Try each and every door,
    Although nearly all of them
    Will lead to hidden guillotines,
    Acid baths, piranha pools
    Or bottomless pits.

    Ariadne, where art thou Princess?
    Bare breasted Minoan girl,
    Who spun his tenuous thread of life
    From the fleece of the golden ram.

    You gave him the ball of wool
    Which unraveled cell by cell
    As he unwound his way towards his Minotaur.

    Theseus may kill the beast.
    That was always a figment of his fear.
    He may walk out of the labyrinth
    With shorn hair and snow white skin,
    Transformed, translucent,
    His broken blade smoking with black blood.

    He will follow Ariadne’s thread
    Through the twists and turns of grief,
    Through recapitulation,
    Through the fast rewind of his life.

    He will stand once more
    On the shores of the blue Aegean Sea,
    As the black sails of his ship
    Crack, and fill with the freshening breeze.




    Submitted on 2009-01-12 07:47:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, I reckon jojocrab (below) has here recorded the archetypal ES comment. Makes me ashamed of my own efforts.

    When we meet one of the heroes, we realize better what the legends are about?
    | Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      very strong wording , good structure , read some poems I written
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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