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    dots Submission Name: Had I not askeddots
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    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 704
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1386



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    dotsHad I not askeddots
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    My curiosity
    has gotten the better of me
    There are so many things about you I want to know

    'Cause I'm an open book, you see
    But you're evasive as can be
    So give me a minute, baby, and tell me everything

    I'll find champagne, and pour a glass
    we can sit down, and have a chat
    you'll tell me things
    I never would have known
    Had I not asked

    This life is lonely, and I'm here
    All by myself, but I've no fear
    That all is well and when time comes I'll be prepared

    Secretly I've cried my tears
    And poured my soul to undeserving ears
    But c'est la vie, and I'll keep living on

    I'll find champagne, and pour a glass
    we can sit down, and have a chat
    you'll tell me things
    I never would have known
    Had I not asked

    And my time is coming
    To prove to this world I'm worth knowing
    But you know, you must know
    That I've got nothing to prove
    Except to you
    To you

    So come with me, reveal yourself
    Don't be shy, there's much to tell
    I hope you're as eager when the time comes
    For me to tell you what I know
    After a lifetime in this world




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