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-at a loss-


Author: GoKart Mozart
Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 131 /93 /49
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /
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-stress-


-at a loss-


So i'll clench my fists
against this raging fire

You turn around
and everything changes

The look in your eyes
blood drains from my face

I didn't see this
and now i'm lost

All that I had planned,
lost in the space between you and I

So what do I do?
What do I do?

What do I do now?




Submitted on 2009-01-13 05:47:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yeah, quite liked this one. Simple and to the point.

My fav line was prob "blood drains from my face" and I also liked "against this raging fire".

Nice start, nice finish. Only real problem I had was the "lost in the space between you and I", as I feel it deviated from the pattern, but then again...

Anyway, good work, I feel!
| Posted on 2009-01-13 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]


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