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    dots Submission Name: A Short Tripdots
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    Author: ReikuTohno
    ASL Info:    17/m/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 1/1/4
    Words: 348
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    dotsA Short Tripdots
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    I went in the room. It was airconditioned but it wasn't that cold. Maybe because of the event that was about to take place.

    I lay on the bed and I hear something like stretching of rubber. I wonder what it is. My imagination ran wild with it but I shook off that thought. Then she came over. She was over me as I was lying down. She told me to open my mouth which I didn't have a choice. This is what I came here for.

    As soon as our session began, my mouth tasted something strange. This wasn't my first time but it had been long since I had this kind of service. I just let the taste flood my mouth. I felt some weird tasting liquid. For some reason, it was going all over my tongue and my teeth.

    She told me not to swallow any of it or she'd get mad. I nodded and kept my mouth open to her. She was on top of me and I couldn't move at ease. I wanted a different position but since this was the reason I came here for, I should just bear it despite my cramping muscles.

    It took a while and the taste was already left in my mouth. Then I tasted blood. Blood? Why would I taste blood? But she just told me not to worry as we went on. After some time, a new taste flooded my mouth. It was different yet more to my liking. I was tempted to swallow but she kept telling me to just let it overflow. I endure it at all the while enjoying it.

    We finished and she gave me something to gargle the taste off. I did and got up as I readied my payment. I paid for it and the transaction was complete.

    I left the building and thought for a while. I enjoyed it deeply and I wanted to go for another again. But I can't. Dental cleanings are best at once every six months.




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      *Cringes* I hate the dentist!!!!! Maybe it's because I have messed up teeth >_> And they always complain about how
    I need to get my mouth wired open and stop biting their fingers. . . But it's their fault for shoving the damn things in there in the first place. You'd think they'd learn, but nooooo!
    | Posted on 2010-02-22 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]


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