i like of instead of just focusing on your own thoughts , you bring in several other parties. what would like be like if we all just thought of ourselves? your considerateness shows that you must be observant.... being observant will always help you in writing and of course i encourage both. just imagine ... you will sooner or later some to a point where you figurative language is absolute fire! of course you use some here... they are decent. i highly appreciate the words that only rhyme by syllable (lingering, singer) when you do that i keepps our minds focused., there was alot un certaintey wheter you where to rhyme or not it seem though... i personally lean toward rhymes myself. Hope to see more from u.