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    dots Submission Name: Last Goodbye (finally finished)dots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 262/263/207
    Words: 374
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 280
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2090



    Description:
       This is the completed song of Last Goodbye. I realized that I was missing a whole verse in the other one.


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    dotsLast Goodbye (finally finished)dots
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    I told you it was for the last time,
    you said I can't waste my life.
    And you said that I just can not go,
    to put down my knife.
    I told you I needed one more time, one more cry, one more last goodbye.
    You said that your would hang up
    if I cut my wrist again
    So I said goodbye I guess
    I'll hang up for you then.
    I told you I needed one more time, one more cry, one more last goodbye.(chorus)

    Chorus
    I stand here with a knife in my hand
    and a blade against my wrist.
    And now you're in my head
    And I might not do this.
    And I stand here with a knife in my hand and a blade on my wrist.
    and blade against my wrist.

    I thought that I should call you again
    And try to tell you bye.
    You're telling me that you miss me
    And you keep asking me why.
    I told you I needed one more time, one more cry, one more last goodbye.
    You tell me that you love me
    And you can't live life alone.
    I tell you I'm so sorry
    But you have to do this on your own.
    I told you I needed one more time, one more cry, one more last goodbye.(chorus)

    Chorus
    I stand here with a knife in my hand
    and a blade against my wrist.
    And now you're in my head
    And I might not do this.
    And I stand here with a knife in my hand and a blade on my wrist.
    and blade against my wrist.

    I'm sorry
    I can not be
    who it is you want
    me to be.
    And even though
    I love you so
    it's time for me
    to move on.
    Now I still have one more time
    one more cry, this is my last goodbye.

    Chorus
    I stand here with a knife in my hand
    and a blade against my wrist.
    And now you're in my head
    And I might not do this.
    And I stand here with a knife in my hand and a blade on my wrist.
    and blade against my wrist.





    Submitted on 2009-01-14 05:46:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If you REALLY think and feel like this, go visit a shrink, --- so much better than inflicting it on readers here. We all have pains and aches of our own. Sorry, Ted.
    | Posted on 2009-03-16 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      Gory,gory,
    what a story.
    Reading about dory's
    shipwrecked lore(y)
    much better glory
    than wrist so gory.
    | Posted on 2009-01-14 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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