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    dots Submission Name: A Cold Chilldots
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    Author: ReikuTohno
    ASL Info:    17/m/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 1/1/4
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsA Cold Chilldots
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    It was an incredibly cold day. I needed to warm up. And I have just the thing to do so.

    I cupped them and felt their warm texture. I couldn't wait that much longer so I literally ripped off the obstruction that lay between me and those which I crave for. My left hand squeezed it gently as I placed my lips over the warm mound. I bit and nibbled on it playfully as its warmth gave me warmth as well.

    My finger on my right hand started to feel wet and hot. I knew that I had placed them in by mistake. I took my fingers to my mouth and savored the taste. My left hand continued to hold on as I positioned myself to be able to placed the other to my mouth. As my nose neared it, the sweet scent wafted to my nostrils. I couldn't wait any more. I want it now.

    I was literally eating it up as I took in the juices in my mouth as the same time. Normally, I wasn't fond of this but I found this time as a bit addicting. I felt my body warm up and get hot as the savory liquid went down my throat. I started to sweat and I knew that after this I'd be satisfied at the least. I didn't have to go all the way to satiated this hunger. This would suffice.

    I pulled away from the addicting source of flesh and juices as I focused my attention on the mound in which I held on my left hand a bit tightly. I placed my lips over it and nibbled a bit harder. I could feel the warmth from inside it and felt the hunger increase.

    I didn't know in which I should take first. I only have one mouth. I can only focus. I decided to finish off the one on my right. The hot liquid giving a slightly licking sensation to my tongue as the meat touched it. Ah, I want to finished it already.

    I finished in a while and I felt all warm and sweaty. On this cold day, this was just what I needed. I didn't have to go all the way down the street in this cold spell. I wondered if I should do this again tonight as I finished up the still warm bread after finishing the steaming cup of instant noodles.




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