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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Fill in the Spaces

    I see these spaces
    These almost mocking moments
    Of empty places
    Frequenting the hours
    In their lackadaisical way
    To merely taunt other thoughts
    That linger on what they deem as whimsical

    Easy to shrug them aside
    These mortuary faces of denial
    Simple it has become
    To loose them and elude them
    Fantasy and reality slide
    I make more than I
    Adept dreamers cannot be defied

    It matters not in these spaces
    Or in the yabbering jabbering moments
    They do not know of the secret places
    Which frequent the hours
    In their aloof appraisal
    They are far to lazy and to well heeled
    Of silent seconds spent in connections mystical

    My smile writes a hidden tapestry
    When her warmth touches
    This sequestered momentum
    Of a unity reaches beyond
    Such hard driven assumptions of need
    My cipher bids a more fluent empathy
    Than the hustled bustle of empty spaces mockery




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