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    dots Submission Name: Mornings Bring Snowdots
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    Author: AlmostEloquent
    ASL Info:    20/female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 46/70/37
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 739
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    dotsMornings Bring Snowdots
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    Winter brings a
    solitude
    I‘d choose to soon forget.
    It roars with a cold,
    bitter growl,
    deafening until I hear,
    see,
    feel nothing.
    And in this numbness
    (sleep away the wintery day)
    I find
    the gaiety of
    summer drawn in
    spicy oranges and
    tangy greens.
    The sweet remembrance of an almost kiss…
    The laughter carried
    on buzzing blue skies
    filling up
    my mouth
    with its saccharine taste.
    Grass kissed feet
    dance across the lawn
    to you (receptive and amused
    at the childish antics
    before you)
    and I know I’m Home,
    my very own Summer,
    where I’m supposed to be.
    Embraces
    vibrant and demanding
    interlace our limbs and I hate
    that a breeze is picking up,
    with a howl
    it releases snow upon my hair and
    I realize.
    As the yellow yoke
    Of the sun drips
    Through my window
    The dawn cracked open,
    I wake.




    Submitted on 2009-01-15 04:59:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this piece... and I feel like it's sad and not sad... and I read it happy AND sad... which might mean I'm bipolar, but I can deal with that.

    Wow, not sure what else to say, but your descriptions were beautiful, it's like you drew the setting in from of my face. I felt warm, too, haha. I thought of my own love. I don't know, it just reminds me and makes me feel about when times are not hard and love flows more free that way. People take more time to notice.

    Anyways, this was beauty. Thanks for the share. Left me feeling bright.
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I too was going to pull out favorite parts, but also found I'd be copying the whole write! This is a light-hearted, pleasant read...I enjoyed it in its entirety....but I have to, just have to, pick out a favorite line...
    "The sweet remembrance of an almost kiss…"
    Gosh...how absolutely take-me-back dreamy!
    Thanks for sharing!
    ~Kimmy~
    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]
      there are some beautiful lines through this piece. really. there is a dreaminess that you capture incredibly well.

    i was gonna pull out parts that were just brilliant (description wise) but it seems silly as i think i would just copy and paste the whole poem.

    really, just a great and enjoyable piece that i think anyone with a heart could feel. the emotion pops from the page.

    thanks for the enjoyable read. (smile).


    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      summer drawn in
    spicy oranges and
    tangy greens.

    :)

    It's been unusually windy here the past few days. Now I don't usually mind the cold--in fact, I love it. I can't get enough--but your poem made me want the summer and my own "amazing person" to share it with.
    Your poem is dry mouths and popsicles, living heat and green. Just green.
    Living on a tropical island, I'm not exactly deprived of these things and take them for granted. Now I don't want to.
    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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