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    dots Submission Name: Are You Dead Now ?dots
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    Author: col13x
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAre You Dead Now ?dots
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    Are You Dead Now ?

    Did you die quietly
    Without a whisper of complaint
    Did all your desires
    Fall from your lips
    Merely as unspoken breath

    Did you die silently
    In the numb recesses
    Of everything wasted
    In a life time un-noted and un-counted
    And just faded away

    Did you die unheeded
    With a million questions
    Broken and unraveled
    Like so many pieces of wasted thought
    So pointlessly keen as they slipped away

    Did you die
    And so did not count the sun as a friend
    Or consider when its heartbeat might end
    And think in the night that no one should see you
    And no one would miss you

    Are you dead now
    Was your name just simply called
    Written with chalk on a blackboard
    Dust to dust as you are wiped away
    Into silence

    Dead then
    And there is nothing I can say or do
    No words I can pass to re-ignite your soul
    Love life they say and life will love you
    Die; and you die; alone







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