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    dots Submission Name: The Life and Times Of Fanne Adoredots

    Author: kb55592
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    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
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    dotsThe Life and Times Of Fanne Adoredots

    Part Three

    School i thought wasn't so bad,just being a child filled with total strangers confused and scared me.I had so much knowledge and time that I always thought that school didn't have to come first in life.Instead of opening up to my new school "Goldzone Elementary" I immeadiatley looked for a computer to hack and find information."stupid computer!" I said as it loaded so slow.Then I thought "what am I doing?!" i shouldn't be on a electronic device to find out my heritage I should be asking my family like grandmother or something."Hey sweet thang." a student said in a "ain't I fine voice".I hesitated to nod my head but did it out of pity since the only way boys can call on girls{Me}is in a dumb way."My name's David but the ladies call me Davito,well the latino ladies call me that..um."Look", "I would like to talk but I have to do something important so bye."Wait!"said David "I didn't mean to be mean I just wanted to say "hi"."Oh well hi..and bye!"I walked off swiftly and as I was walking i noticed that some boys were smiling at me,sime girls were glaring and snickering at me,and this one geeky girl waved at me and fell.I laughed and walked into the classroom by my right.

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