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In Silence

Author: Mandi Gayle
ASL Info:    22/Female/Kentucky
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 298 /348 /150
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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In Silence

He waits for me in silence,
No judgment in his eyes;
I shudder in his presence
To his soul’s anointing cries.

His arms around my back
I am protected from it all;
Every snap, every crack
Of the whip at Satan’s call.

The demons dance around,
Sowing doubt and taunting:
“True love you haven’t found!”
Their voices low and haunting.

But his hands cover my ears,
As his lips caress my own;
And never could I doubt
The love that he has shown.

Submitted on 2009-01-16 09:53:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This piece is really lovely, it can be as a person or as to going to God...
To me strikes me as talking about going to a savior, someone that I view as God-like but the ending verse shows that he is human, as I am.
Its really a pleasure to log in and realise that you have posted a couple of new pieces. I still love your work!
| Posted on 2009-01-18 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]

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