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    dots Submission Name: In Silencedots
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    Author: Mandi Gayle
    ASL Info:    22/Female/Kentucky
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 298/348/150
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIn Silencedots
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    He waits for me in silence,
    No judgment in his eyes;
    I shudder in his presence
    To his soulís anointing cries.

    His arms around my back
    I am protected from it all;
    Every snap, every crack
    Of the whip at Satanís call.

    The demons dance around,
    Sowing doubt and taunting:
    ďTrue love you havenít found!Ē
    Their voices low and haunting.

    But his hands cover my ears,
    As his lips caress my own;
    And never could I doubt
    The love that he has shown.




    Submitted on 2009-01-16 09:53:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece is really lovely, it can be as a person or as to going to God...
    To me strikes me as talking about going to a savior, someone that I view as God-like but the ending verse shows that he is human, as I am.
    Its really a pleasure to log in and realise that you have posted a couple of new pieces. I still love your work!
    | Posted on 2009-01-18 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]


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